Discussion essay(Discuss both views and give your opinion)是台灣考生最容易寫歪的題型——要嘛只寫一邊,要嘛兩邊都敷衍。本篇把同一題寫成 Band 6 / 7 / 8 三版,讓你看「兼顧兩邊」到「有立場的平衡」到「辯證式整合」的具體差距。
題目
Some people believe that smartphones have improved the way we communicate. Others argue that they have made real communication worse. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Write at least 250 words.
Version A — Band 6(約 265 字)
Today smartphones are very popular. Some people think smartphones make communication better, but other people think they make it worse. In this essay I will discuss both sides.
Many people think smartphones are good for communication. First, smartphones help us talk to friends and family who are far away. For example, my cousin lives in Canada and I can video call her every week for free. This is very good. Second, smartphones have many apps like WhatsApp and Line, so we can send messages quickly. We don't have to wait for letters. Also we can send photos and videos.
However, some people think smartphones are bad for communication. They say when people use phones all the time, they don't talk to the people around them. For example, in restaurants, many families sit together but everyone looks at their phone. They don't talk to each other. This is not real communication. Also, on the phone we cannot see face and body, so sometimes we misunderstand each other.
In my opinion, I think smartphones have good and bad sides. They help us talk to far away people, but they also make us ignore near people. The most important thing is to use smartphones carefully. We should not use phones when we are with family and friends. We should use them to connect people, not to replace face to face communication.
In conclusion, smartphones can make communication better or worse. It depends on how we use them.
Version B — Band 7(約 285 字)
Few technologies have transformed daily communication as profoundly as the smartphone. While some argue that instant connectivity has enriched our relationships, others contend that constant screen use has in fact eroded meaningful interaction. This essay will consider both positions before explaining why, on balance, the critics have a stronger case.
Supporters of smartphones point out that distance is no longer an obstacle. Video-calling apps such as WhatsApp and FaceTime allow migrants, international students, and separated families to maintain daily contact at almost no cost — a possibility unthinkable a generation ago. Moreover, text-based messaging enables quick coordination among work teams and friends, which has streamlined the logistics of modern life.
On the other hand, critics point to the well-documented phenomenon of "phubbing" — the habit of snubbing companions in favour of one's phone. Research from Taiwan's National Chengchi University found that couples who reported frequent phone use during meals also reported lower relationship satisfaction. Face-to-face conversation, rich in tone, facial expression, and pause, conveys emotional nuance that emojis cannot match. When device use becomes habitual, the depth of in-person exchange suffers accordingly.
In my view, although smartphones have undoubtedly expanded who we can reach, they have simultaneously weakened how we engage with those physically present. The former is a genuine gain for maintaining long-distance relationships; the latter is a real cost in the quality of everyday bonds. On balance, the erosion of attentive presence seems the greater loss, because video calls supplement existing relationships, whereas phone distraction undermines them.
Smartphones, therefore, are a tool whose value depends almost entirely on the discipline of the user.
Version C — Band 8(約 300 字)
The smartphone is perhaps the most ambivalent communication technology ever devised: it has simultaneously widened our reach and narrowed our attention. Whether this amounts to a gain or a loss depends, I would argue, on which dimension of communication one privileges — breadth or depth.
Advocates rightly observe that the smartphone has collapsed geography. A daughter working in London can now share the texture of a Tuesday evening with her parents in Kaohsiung; a diaspora can remain a community rather than fragment into isolated individuals. The cost of sustaining such bonds, once measured in international-call charges and weeks-late letters, has been driven effectively to zero. For the geographically dispersed, this is not a convenience — it is a lifeline.
Detractors, however, draw attention to a subtler erosion. The very ubiquity that sustains distant relationships tends to disrupt proximate ones. The term "phubbing" — phone-snubbing — entered research vocabularies in 2016, and studies since have consistently linked heavy in-meal phone use to diminished relational satisfaction. What once felt like companionable silence now carries the anxiety that one's partner is elsewhere, attentively so, while sitting across the table.
My own position is that both observations are correct, but asymmetrically weighted. The gains accrue in situations where no alternative exists — without a smartphone, my London friend would simply drift. The losses, by contrast, accrue in situations where a superior alternative is already present: the person opposite me. To that extent, smartphones enhance relationships that cannot otherwise be conducted and degrade those that can.
What follows is not a verdict on the device but on its placement: valuable as a bridge across distance, corrosive as a competitor for attention already given.
逐項對照(五個維度)
1. Task Response — 如何處理 "both views + opinion"
| Band | 兩邊處理 | 個人立場 | 典型證據 | |------|----------|----------|----------| | 6 | 各寫一段但一樣淺;意見是「兩邊都有道理」 | 弱、沒有真正選擇 | "In my opinion, I think smartphones have good and bad sides." — 幾乎沒立場 | | 7 | 兩邊都發展完整;立場明確傾向一邊,有理由 | "the critics have a stronger case" — 有選 | "the erosion of attentive presence seems the greater loss, because video calls supplement... whereas phone distraction undermines..." | | 8 | 兩邊辯證整合,而不是輪流講 | 立場 reframe 整題(breadth vs depth) | "smartphones enhance relationships that cannot otherwise be conducted and degrade those that can." — 不是選邊,是重切議題 |
2. Coherence & Cohesion
| Band | 連接詞 | 段落邏輯 | 典型證據 | |------|--------|----------|----------| | 6 | First / Second / Also / However / In conclusion — 機械、B1 | 每段主題 + 例子,但段間缺連結 | "Also we can send photos and videos." — 突然結束 | | 7 | On the other hand / Moreover / On balance / accordingly — 多樣 | 結語段回應 body 的主張 | "When device use becomes habitual, the depth of in-person exchange suffers accordingly." — 因果鏈完整 | | 8 | simultaneously / to that extent / what follows is not X but Y — 精密 | 一條主線(breadth vs depth)貫穿全文 | "The gains accrue in situations where no alternative exists ... The losses, by contrast, accrue in situations where a superior alternative is already present." |
3. Lexical Resource
| Band | 詞彙 | 典型證據 | |------|------|----------| | 6 | good / bad / very / popular / far away / near — 基礎 | "smartphones are very popular" | | 7 | enriched / eroded / streamlined / attentive presence / supplement | "constant screen use has in fact eroded meaningful interaction" | | 8 | ambivalent / collapsed geography / companionable silence / asymmetrically weighted / corrosive as a competitor — 文學質地 | "The smartphone is perhaps the most ambivalent communication technology ever devised" |
4. Grammatical Range
| Band | 句型複雜度 | 證據 | |------|------------|------| | 6 | 簡單句為主、重複 we | "We should not use phones when we are with family and friends." | | 7 | Complex sentences with subordination、passive、participle phrase | "Research from Taiwan's National Chengchi University found that couples who reported frequent phone use during meals also reported lower relationship satisfaction." | | 8 | Semicolons, em-dashes, inversion, reduced relative clauses | "The cost of sustaining such bonds, once measured in international-call charges and weeks-late letters, has been driven effectively to zero." |
5. Handling of the "discussion" structure
| Band | 手法 | |------|------| | 6 | 兩邊並列、結論說「視情況而定」 | | 7 | 兩邊並列、結論選一邊並解釋為什麼 | | 8 | 重新定義兩邊其實是不同維度、結論整合 |
Takeaway — Band 6 寫作者的三個高槓桿升級
升級 1:捨棄 "In my opinion I think both sides have good points"
這句是 Band 6 的標籤。改寫:"On balance, X is the stronger case, because Y supplements existing relationships whereas Z undermines them." 立場 + 具體原因 = 多 0.5。
升級 2:每段 body 至少塞一個次要讓步(concession)
Band 7 不是「我贏、你輸」;是「你有一點對,但我更對」。練習句:
- While it is true that ___, this ignores ___.
- Supporters rightly observe ___, yet ___.
- Admittedly ___; however, ___.
升級 3:練習「重新定義題目」的 intro
Band 6 intro 只把題目換字說一次;Band 7/8 的 intro 會給題目一個角度。
範例:
- Band 6:Some people think smartphones are good, others think they are bad.
- Band 7:This essay will... explain why the critics have a stronger case.
- Band 8:Whether this amounts to a gain or a loss depends on which dimension of communication one privileges — breadth or depth.
每寫新題,先問:「這題表面爭 A vs B,底下其實在爭什麼?」