多張圓餅圖最怕寫成「第一張圓餅顯示… 第二張圓餅顯示…」。本篇用三國（印度、英國、巴西）用水分布示範怎麼跨國同角度比較，而不是每國單獨描述。
題目與數據
The pie charts below show how fresh water is used in India, the United Kingdom and Brazil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
資料（單位：% of national freshwater use）：
| 用途 | 印度 India | 英國 UK | 巴西 Brazil | |------|------------|---------|-------------| | 農業 Agriculture | 78 | 10 | 60 | | 工業 Industry | 10 | 30 | 18 | | 家庭 Domestic | 8 | 55 | 20 | | 其他 Other | 4 | 5 | 2 |
完整範文（165 字）
¹ The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of fresh water allocated to agriculture, industry, domestic and other uses in India, the United Kingdom and Brazil.
² Overall, agriculture dominates water consumption in India and Brazil, whereas the UK is alone in devoting the largest share to domestic use, reflecting the contrast between agrarian and service-based economies.
³ In India, farming is by far the principal consumer, accounting for more than three-quarters of total water use at 78%, while industrial and domestic demands are comparatively marginal at 10% and 8% respectively. ⁴ Brazil follows a broadly similar, though less extreme, pattern — agriculture still takes the majority share at 60%, with domestic use at a much higher 20% than in India.
⁵ The United Kingdom, by contrast, presents an almost inverted profile. ⁶ Household consumption absorbs more than half of all freshwater at 55%, and industry takes a further 30%, leaving agriculture with just 10% — less than one-seventh of the Indian figure — and other uses virtually trivial at 5%.
句句 Band Descriptor 解析
- 句 1 — Task Achievement: 改寫題目——allocated to 比 used for 更學術。
- 句 2 — Task Achievement (Overview): 先分組（印 + 巴 vs 英）再說差異成因（agrarian vs service-based economies）——Overview 裡加一句 insight 非常加分。
- 句 3 — Lexical: the principal consumer / comparatively marginal — 主 / 次對比一組詞。
- 句 4 — Coherence: a broadly similar, though less extreme, pattern — 精準描述「方向相同但程度不同」。
- 句 5 — Coherence: by contrast, presents an almost inverted profile — 關鍵轉折 + inverted 精確描述「角色倒置」。
- 句 6 — Grammar Range: leaving agriculture with just 10%... and other uses virtually trivial — 分詞片語 + 比較子句一句處理兩點。
9 組高分詞彙
| Phrase | 中文 | |--------|------| | allocated to | 分配給 | | the principal consumer | 主要使用者 | | comparatively marginal | 相對微小 | | the majority share | 過半比例 | | an almost inverted profile | 幾乎相反的組成 | | absorb more than half | 吸納逾半 | | less than one-seventh of | 不到…的七分之一 | | virtually trivial | 幾近微不足道 | | agrarian vs service-based economies | 農業 vs 服務業經濟體 |
本篇避開的常見錯誤
錯誤：三個圓餅各寫一段。 結構成 In India... In the UK... In Brazil...，每段四個百分比念完。這是 Band 5.5–6.0。
本範文的結構——同角度跨國比較：
- §2：India + Brazil 放一起（agriculture 主導，差別只在程度）
- §3：UK 單獨一段，強調 inverted profile（角色倒置）
這樣 comparison 自然出現，overview 也能延伸出「經濟型態差異」的 insight。