光看模板不會寫——要看完整範文每一句為什麼得分。這篇用一個實考題做標註範本。
題目
Some people believe that schools should teach students how to manage money as a compulsory subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
題型：Opinion (Agree/Disagree)。我的立場：strongly agree。
完整範文（280 字）
¹ The question of whether financial literacy should be a mandatory part of the school curriculum has become increasingly prominent in recent years. ² In my view, this is an entirely justified proposal, as money management is a life skill that directly affects students' long-term wellbeing and cannot be reliably learnt elsewhere.
³ The first and most compelling reason is that financial mistakes made in early adulthood can follow individuals for decades. ⁴ Without formal instruction, young people often rely on trial and error when handling credit cards, student loans, or their first salary — and the costs can be severe. ⁵ A 2022 UK government study found that graduates who had received no budgeting education at school were three times more likely to fall into problem debt by the age of 25. ⁶ Structured lessons on saving, budgeting, and interest would prevent a substantial share of these avoidable outcomes.
⁷ Furthermore, unlike subjects such as literature or history, money management is unlikely to be taught effectively at home. ⁸ Many parents lack confidence in their own financial knowledge, particularly regarding newer areas such as investment apps or cryptocurrency. ⁹ Relying on families therefore creates a significant inequality: children from financially literate households acquire the skills, while others do not. ¹⁰ Making the subject compulsory at school would close this gap and ensure every student receives the same foundation, regardless of background.
¹¹ In conclusion, I strongly agree that financial literacy should be a required subject. ¹² Given its lifelong consequences and the fact that no other source reliably provides this education, treating it as equivalent to core subjects is both sensible and necessary.
句句解析
§1 — Intro
- 句 1 (Hook): "The question of whether ___ has become increasingly prominent..." — 不直接抄題，是 paraphrase + current-issue 姿態。✓ Lexical resource
- 句 2 (Thesis): "In my view, this is an entirely justified proposal, as..." — 強立場 (entirely justified) + 兩個預告理由。✓ Task Response
§2 — 第一個理由
- 句 3 (Topic sentence): "The first and most compelling reason is..." — 明確 signpost。
- 句 4 (Explanation): "Without formal instruction, young people often..." — 具體化「為什麼會是問題」。
- 句 5 (Example): "A 2022 UK government study found that graduates..." — 虛構沒關係（IELTS 不查證），但要可信：有年代、有國家、有數字。✓ Lexical resource
- 句 6 (Link): "Structured lessons on ___ would prevent..." — 回到提案（「教」）。
§3 — 第二個理由
- 句 7 (Topic sentence + 對比): "Furthermore, unlike subjects such as..." — 用對比帶出「其他科目家裡可以教，這科不行」。✓ Coherence
- 句 8 (Develop): "Many parents lack confidence..." — 強化「家裡教不會」。
- 句 9 (Consequence): "Relying on families therefore creates a significant inequality..." — 把個人問題升級到社會議題。✓ Task Response（深度）
- 句 10 (Link): "Making the subject compulsory... would close this gap..." — 回到提案。
§4 — Conclusion
- 句 11 (Reinforce): "In conclusion, I strongly agree..." — 重申立場。
- 句 12 (Justify): "Given its lifelong consequences and..." — 兩個 because 的濃縮版。
Band 7 這篇得在哪
Task Response: 7
- 明確表態（entirely justified, strongly agree）
- 兩個理由都充分發展
- 結論呼應 intro
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
- 段落分明、每段有明確功能
- Linkers 多樣：The first and most compelling, Furthermore, In conclusion, therefore, Given...
- Referent 清楚（this proposal, this gap）
Lexical Resource: 7
- Topic-specific: financial literacy, compulsory, credit cards, problem debt, inequality, compulsory subject
- Academic: increasingly prominent, entirely justified, substantial share, lifelong consequences
- 沒有重複單字（teach 換成 instruction / lessons / education）
Grammar Range: 7
- Passive: can be reliably learnt
- Relative clause: graduates who had received no budgeting education
- Conditional: would prevent... would close...
- Complex noun phrases: children from financially literate households
你怎麼用這篇提升自己
- 把範文遮住一段，自己寫看看 — 然後對照。
- 圈出所有 linker，做成自己的清單。
- 把 §2 跟 §3 結構畫出來（Topic → Explain → Example → Link），下一次寫套這個模型。
- 抄寫一次。抄寫是最被低估的練習法——你的手會記住 B2 的句型。