Task 2 寫作有個台灣考生反覆犯的錯:例子轟炸

一段裡塞三個例子:

For example, Japan... Also in Korea... And in Singapore...

結果每個例子只有半句話——每個都沒展開。整段變成 Band 6。

為什麼一個強例子贏

Band 7+ 評分的 Task Response 看的是論點發展深度。三個半句例子 = 3 × 膚淺。一個展開的例子 = 1 × 深入。深入 > 多

對比感受

❌ 三個弱例子(Band 6)

For example, many countries have shown this. Japan has a culture of long working hours. Korea has similar problems. And in the United States, people also work long hours. These examples show that overwork is common.

問題:三個國家名,但都只是貼標籤。沒有具體數字、沒有分析、沒有跟論點的連結。

✅ 一個強例子(Band 7+)

Japan offers a striking illustration of this phenomenon. Government statistics from 2022 showed that roughly 25% of full-time employees worked over 49 hours per week — among the highest rates in the developed world — and the Ministry of Health now officially recognises karoshi (death from overwork) as a workplace hazard. What this suggests is that a long-hours culture is not merely inefficient; when institutionalised, it produces measurable public health costs that societies eventually pay for.

差別

  • 具體數字(25%, 49 hours)
  • 具體機構(Ministry of Health)
  • 專有名詞(karoshi)
  • 回扣主論點(公衛成本)

強例子的四個元素

DDNL

  • Date(年份):A 2022 study / In the 1990s
  • Data(數字):25% / tripled / £6 billion
  • Name(專有名詞):國家、機構、人名、產品名
  • Link(回論點):What this suggests is... / This illustrates how...

四個都有 → Band 7。缺兩個以上 → Band 6。

例子編得沒關係

IELTS 不查證。你可以虛構統計——但要可信

  • 年份接近(2018-2024)
  • 機構存在(Ministry of Education, UN, OECD)
  • 數字合理(不要 95%, 1%——太極端看起來假)

虛構但 plausible 的例子 = 真的例子,評分完全一樣。

試試看

找你最近一篇 Task 2。每段圈出例子。問自己:

  • 有 D D N L 四元素嗎?
  • 缺什麼 → 把它加上,換掉段裡另一個弱例子。

一段改一次。下次寫時會自然往這方向走。


深入閱讀:Task 2 Opinion Band 7+ 完整範文