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題目卡
Describe a goal that you achieved.
You should say:
- what the goal was
- when you set it
- how you achieved it
- and explain how you felt when you achieved it.
POWER 一分鐘筆記
| POWER | 關鍵字 | 中文註 | |-------|--------|--------| | People | me alone, no coach | 誰參與 | | Occasion | set the goal Jan 2023, ran the race Nov 2023 | 時間長度 | | What | finish a half-marathon under 2 hours | 具體目標 + 數字 | | Emotion | self-doubt at km 16, finished at 1:54 | 過程波折 | | Reflection | not the time, the discipline of training | 真正的收穫 |
完整範答(312 字)
¹ A goal I set myself and eventually managed to achieve was running a half-marathon in under two hours — twenty-one kilometres at a sustained pace, which doesn't sound dramatic but, for someone who genuinely couldn't run for a bus a few years ago, was a real stretch. ² I set the goal at the start of 2023, after spending an entire pandemic year quietly losing fitness, and I gave myself eleven months to get there.
³ I followed a beginner's training plan I found online — three runs a week, increasing the long run by no more than ten per cent each week, with a recovery week every fourth week. ⁴ The first month was honestly demoralising; I could barely manage three kilometres without stopping, and I remember seriously considering quitting on at least four separate occasions.
⁵ Things shifted around month three. ⁶ I'd built up to comfortable ten-kilometre Sunday runs, and for the first time in my adult life I started to look forward to the next one rather than dread it. ⁷ By month seven I was hitting fifteen kilometres regularly, and I actually signed up for a race in Taipei the following November to give myself a hard deadline.
⁸ Race day itself was strange — much harder than I'd prepared for emotionally, but mechanically simpler than I'd feared. ⁹ I hit a real low patch around kilometre sixteen where every part of me wanted to walk, but I'd promised myself before the start that I wouldn't, and I held on. ¹⁰ I crossed the line at one hour fifty-four.
¹¹ What surprised me wasn't the time itself — it was the realisation that the goal had basically already been achieved by month four, when I'd quietly become someone who runs three times a week. ¹² The race was just the receipt.
句句解析
- 句 1 (Goal — specific number): "under two hours... twenty-one kilometres" — 具體量化 + couldn't run for a bus 自嘲。
- 句 2 (Origin — time + context): "after spending an entire pandemic year quietly losing fitness" — past continuous + 時代脈絡。
- 句 3 (Plan — specific 數字): "three runs a week, no more than ten per cent each week" — 訓練具體性。
- 句 4 (Difficulty — honest): "considering quitting on at least four separate occasions" — demoralising 是強動詞形容詞。
- 句 5 (Pivot — short sentence): "Things shifted around month three." — 短句節奏變化。
- 句 6 (內在轉變): "started to look forward to the next one rather than dread it" — rather than 對比動詞。
- 句 7 (Progress + 行動): "give myself a hard deadline" — 動詞片語精準。
- 句 8 (對比 — emotional vs mechanical): "emotionally harder, mechanically simpler" — 副詞對比。
- 句 9 (敘事高潮): "every part of me wanted to walk, but I'd promised myself..." — past perfect。
- 句 10 (極短句結算): "I crossed the line at one hour fifty-four." — 數據收尾。
- 句 11 (Reframe — 核心): "the goal had basically already been achieved by month four" — past perfect + 抽象 reframe。
- 句 12 (Aphoristic landing): "The race was just the receipt." — 比喻收。
Band 7 評分證據
- Grammar: past simple、past continuous、past perfect、rather than + V-ing、by month four 時間從句
- Lexical: demoralising, sustained pace, quietly losing fitness, low patch, the receipt (metaphor)
- Task Response: what / when / how / how-felt 四 bullet 全 explicit
- Cohesion: 時間軸 Jan 2023 / month 1 / month 3 / month 7 / race day
- Long-turn coverage: 312 字穩定支撐 1.5–2 分鐘
3 個可替換 Hook
Hook A — 學業
A goal I'm proud of achieving was getting into a postgraduate programme in design at a British university. I'd set the goal in my final year of undergraduate, despite knowing my portfolio at the time wasn't really competitive enough.
Hook B — 戒掉某事
A goal I set myself and surprisingly kept was quitting social media for an entire year. I made the decision on my twenty-fifth birthday, after realising I'd spent more hours on Instagram that year than on my actual hobbies combined.
Hook C — 存錢
A goal I achieved last year was saving enough money to buy my mother her first proper trip abroad — two weeks in Hokkaido for her sixtieth birthday. I'd set the goal eighteen months earlier and worked out I needed to set aside about eight thousand New Taiwan dollars a month to manage it.
替換鐵律:目標題的 Band 7+ 公式 = 具體數字目標 + 真實的中途自我懷疑 + 達成當下 + 後來才發現真正的收穫不是結果。最後一句反高潮最值錢。