公園地圖題若用「東邊有 X、西邊有 Y、南邊有 Z」逐點寫法會變流水帳。本篇用 Greenfield Park 重新設計示範分區描述法 (zone-based)——以「北半 vs 南半」或「池塘周邊 vs 入口區」為主軸把 6 項變化編成兩段流暢敘事。
題目與描述
The two maps below show Greenfield Park before and after a major redesign in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
重設計前 (Before) 元素：
- 公園北半：大片 grass field（草地）+ 一個 small pond（小池塘）
- 公園中段：一條 east-west footpath（東西向步道）橫貫
- 公園南半：tennis courts（網球場）×2 + small playground（兒童遊樂場）
- 西側入口：main entrance（主入口）+ small car park（小停車場）
重設計後 (After) 元素：
- grass field 縮小，東半部改建為 outdoor amphitheatre（戶外圓形劇場）
- pond 被保留並擴大兩倍，周邊新增 wooden boardwalk（木棧道）
- footpath 改為 winding cycle path（曲折自行車道）
- tennis courts 拆除，改為 community garden（社區園圃）
- playground 翻新並擴大
- 西側 car park 拆除，主入口改為 pedestrian-only plaza（行人專用廣場）
完整範文（168 字）
¹ The two maps illustrate how Greenfield Park was reconfigured during a major redevelopment carried out in 2024.
² Overall, the park was transformed from a fairly utilitarian green space into a more diverse, pedestrian-focused recreational area, with vehicles excluded entirely and the natural water feature given far greater prominence.
³ The most extensive changes took place in the northern half of the park, where roughly half of the grass field was cleared to make way for an outdoor amphitheatre, and the small pond was enlarged to double its original size and encircled by a wooden boardwalk. ⁴ The straight east-west footpath that once bisected the site was replaced by a winding cycle path linking the two halves.
⁵ In the southern section, the two tennis courts were removed and converted into a community garden, while the playground next door was retained but considerably extended. ⁶ Finally, the western car park was demolished, allowing the main entrance to be reopened as a pedestrian-only plaza.
句句 Band Descriptor 解析
- 句 1 — Task Achievement: was reconfigured during a major redevelopment — reconfigure / redevelopment 取代 changed。
- 句 2 — Task Achievement (Overview): 轉型 + 二級特徵——from utilitarian green space into diverse pedestrian-focused area + vehicles excluded / pond given prominence。地圖題 overview 黃金結構。
- 句 3 — Grammar Range: roughly half of the grass field was cleared to make way for... and the small pond was enlarged... and encircled by — 三連被動 + 目的子句。
- 句 4 — Lexical: bisected the site — 高階動詞描述「橫切」。
- 句 5 — Coherence: In the southern section — 分區轉場詞。next door 表「相鄰」自然口語化。
- 句 6 — Lexical: allowing the main entrance to be reopened as — 分詞片語表示「結果」，避免再開新句。
10 組高分詞彙
| Phrase | 中文 | |--------|------| | be reconfigured / redeveloped | 被重新規劃 | | the northern half of the park | 公園北半 | | be cleared to make way for | 被清除以騰出空間給 | | be enlarged to double its original size | 被擴建至原本的兩倍 | | be encircled by | 被…環繞 | | bisect the site | 將場地一分為二 | | winding cycle path | 蜿蜒的自行車道 | | pedestrian-only plaza | 行人專用廣場 | | be retained but considerably extended | 被保留但大幅擴建 | | vehicles excluded entirely | 車輛完全被排除 |
本篇避開的常見錯誤
**錯誤：用 there is / there are 描述地圖元素。** Before, there was a pond. After, there is a bigger pond. — 完全沒在描述「變化」，只是並列兩個現狀，Task Achievement 卡 5.5。
地圖題寫變化的鐵律——用「動作動詞 + 被動」：
- 消失：was demolished / was removed / was cleared
- 擴建：was enlarged / was extended / was expanded
- 改造：was converted into / was reconfigured / was replaced by
- 保留：was retained / remained on its original site
本範文 6 項變化全部用動作動詞，**沒有一句 *there is/was***——這是地圖題 Band 7+ 的最低門檻。