教育目標題在 2023-2025 連續三年登場——核心問:「童年該優先教什麼?」本篇用 Band 7+ 範文示範怎麼明確選邊但不偏激。
題目
Some people say that children should learn to compete from a young age, while others believe that cooperation is a more valuable skill.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
題型：Opinion (Agree/Disagree)——雖然句子提到兩方，但結尾是 To what extent do you agree，所以是 opinion 題，不是 discussion。我的立場：lean towards cooperation, while acknowledging competition has a role。
完整範文（294 字）
¹ Whether childhood should be organised around contests or collaboration has long divided parents, teachers and policymakers. ² While I accept that healthy rivalry has its uses, I broadly agree that cooperation is the more valuable disposition to cultivate in young learners, both for their own wellbeing and for the wider workplace they will eventually enter.
³ The strongest case for prioritising cooperation rests on the nature of contemporary work. ⁴ A 2024 OECD survey of employers across twenty-one economies found that 78% rated "the ability to coordinate with diverse colleagues" as the single most difficult skill to recruit, considerably ahead of either technical proficiency or competitive drive. ⁵ Skills of this kind are notoriously slow to acquire later in life, which is precisely why classrooms organised around joint projects, peer feedback and shared problem-solving offer such a useful rehearsal. ⁶ A child who has learned to negotiate disagreement at ten will rarely struggle to do so at thirty.
⁷ A second consideration concerns the psychological cost of early competition. ⁸ When school is framed primarily as a ranking exercise, children who finish outside the top quartile frequently internalise the verdict, with measurable effects on motivation by adolescence. ⁹ Admittedly, a complete absence of competitive pressure can leave young people unprepared for the inevitable contests of university entry and job interviews. ¹⁰ Nevertheless, low-stakes contests embedded within a fundamentally cooperative culture, rather than the reverse, strike the right developmental balance.
¹¹ In conclusion, I largely agree that cooperation deserves priority during childhood, even though competition still has a supporting role. ¹² Given how durable early dispositions prove to be, an education system that rewards collaboration first will produce both happier children and more capable adults.
句句解析
§1 — Intro
- 句 1 (Hook + paraphrase): "Whether childhood should be organised around contests or collaboration..." — paraphrase（compete → contests；cooperation → collaboration），三類人並列展示 noun group。✓ Lexical resource
- 句 2 (Thesis + concession預告): "While I accept... I broadly agree that..." — broadly agree 比 I agree 高階，disposition 取代 skill 避免回抄題目用詞。✓ Task Response
§2 — 第一個理由
- 句 3 (Topic sentence): "The strongest case... rests on the nature of contemporary work." — 強化詞 strongest case 告訴評分員主論點來了。
- 句 4 (Evidence): "A 2024 OECD survey... 78%... considerably ahead of..." — 機構 + 年代 + 樣本範圍 + 數字 + 對比。✓ Lexical resource
- 句 5 (Develop): "Skills of this kind are notoriously slow... which is precisely why..." — which is precisely why 把證據和立場縫起來，文法 range 高。
- 句 6 (Punchy close): "A child who has learned to negotiate... at ten will rarely struggle... at thirty." — relative clause + 時間對比，畫面感強。
§3 — 第二個理由 + Concession
- 句 7 (Topic sentence): "A second consideration concerns the psychological cost..." — 第二個獨立角度，不是延伸第一個。
- 句 8 (Develop): "When school is framed... internalise the verdict, with measurable effects on motivation..." — passive + with- 子句展示文法。
- 句 9 (Concession): "Admittedly, a complete absence of competitive pressure..." — Band 7 分水嶺：承認反方。
- 句 10 (Rebuttal): "Nevertheless, low-stakes contests embedded within a fundamentally cooperative culture, rather than the reverse, strike the right..." — rather than the reverse 是 Band 7+ idiomatic。
§4 — Conclusion
- 句 11 (Restate): "In conclusion, I largely agree..." — 呼應 intro 的 broadly agree。
- 句 12 (Implication): "Given how durable early dispositions prove to be..." — 不是新觀點，是把立場升級成 implication。
四大評分項證據表
| 評分項 | 本篇證據 | Band | |--------------------|----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------|------| | Task Response | 立場明確（broadly agree / largely agree）；兩個獨立理由；承認反方並反駁；結論升級成 implication | 7 | | Coherence & Cohesion | 段落功能分明；linker 多樣（The strongest case, A second consideration, Admittedly, Nevertheless, Given how）；referent 穩定 | 7 | | Lexical Resource | Topic-specific（disposition, internalise the verdict, low-stakes contests, peer feedback）；搭配（recruit for, rehearsal of skills） | 7 | | Grammar Range | Passive（is framed, has been organised）；relative（A child who has learned）；participle（embedded within）；複雜名詞組（a fundamentally cooperative culture） | 7 |
三個可複製的動作
1. broadly agree 取代 I agree
兩個字升級立場精度。再加 with one qualification 就有 concession 預告——Task Response 7 的訊號燈。
2. which is precisely why 縫合證據和立場
句 5 的句型：[Evidence], which is precisely why [policy / classroom design]. 把數據變成行動理由——文法 range + Coherence 雙加分。
3. rather than the reverse 微調反方
句 10 的 "low-stakes contests embedded within a cooperative culture, rather than the reverse" ——一個短語完成「順序對調」的論證，比寫一整句精煉很多。